Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts

Tourism is a flourishing industry in many countries, which is considered as a major source of national income in some countries; the UAE, Thailanad, and India.

This

is because when a large number of tourist influx demand for better services which creates a large number of employment opportunities. Eventually,

this

not only does local businesses boost, but local industries

also

Finally

, if more and more international tourists attract towards a specific country,

this

encourages investment from multinational companies.

Thus

, it is clear that tourism and economy are closely related.

However

, others think that mass tourism may damage the local traditions and alters customs of the local community,

this

may have serious repercussion in a long run.

Similarly

, there are some holiday makers who behave irresponsibly towards the host county, resulting, damage of historical buildings and the surroundings of the structure In many countries, tourism is an individual business which benefits the rich rather than the economically deprived people.

This

means that income may not be utilized for the betterment of the locals.

Submitted by Sal on Wed Oct 30 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

172 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

Topic Vocabulary:

enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
needs of the majority

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing for example through cell phone tracking and security cameras. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
It is undeniable that technology has been increasingly used to monitor citizens, especially through their mobile phones and surveillance systems. This essay will argue that the disadvantages of this trend are outweighed by its merits.
7.5
band
The system used for rubbish or garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. It is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours Suggest what should be done about the problem
Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter with regards to garbage collection issue in our area. I am Dinesh from sector B. I live just near to the sector B bus stand.
5.5
band
An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?
Nowadays, brain drain is a sharp problem for developing countries.
6
band
Some people think it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts, and grandparents) were involved in bringing up children rather than only parents.
some people hold the view that was close relative to participate in raising children, it would be beneficial instead of only mothers and fathers. In my opinion, I tend to disagree with this approach due to children are faced with contrasting styles with their parents as well and their confidence and self-reliance levels decrease.
4.5
band
You recently attended a cookery class and enjoyed it. Now you want to provide feedback to the cookery school. Write a letter to the cookery school. In your letter: Describe the cookery class you attended. Explain what you enjoyed about the class. Suggest some improvements to the class.
I hope this letter finds you well.

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

Some people think it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts, and grandparents) were involved in bringing up children rather than only parents.

You recently attended a cookery class and enjoyed it. Now you want to provide feedback to the cookery school. Write a letter to the cookery school. In your letter: Describe the cookery class you attended. Explain what you enjoyed about the class. Suggest some improvements to the class.