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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it’s depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Teaching is considered as
noble profession
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a noble profession
 because teachers play a huge role in everybody’s life. To which, it is believed by some people that effectiveness of study
is depends
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depends
 on the quality of
teaches
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teaching
 while others believe that it is the perspective of students that matter the most. In my opinion, neither of them alone is efficient, it requires equal and active involvement
from
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of
 both parties to justify the quality of education.
To Begin
 with, a good
teacher
 always has a great impact on the mind of their students. As a student, people learn enormous things about the life from their teachers, not only the syllabus but
also
 the attitude about the life.
Moreover
, a
better
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good
teacher
 has the power to plant seeds of curiosity, which one of the crucial attribute to learn something new, and set the course of their lives.
For instance
, MIT is widely popular because of its world-class professors.
On the contrary
, some teachers who are not that good teaching affect children so deeply that they lose interest in those subjects for the lifetime.
Thus
, the significance of standard
teacher
 is crystal clear.
However
, the perception of
receiver
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the receiver
 is equally crucial to call schooling a success. It does not matter how effective is one as a
teacher
, if their pupils are with no intention to learn or study, the teaching will be useless. The number of dropouts from the Howard is a clear example of the situation.
On the other hand
, attentive and aware students can make up for poor quality teachers by self-study without any supervision, which is very essential for success in the future.
Thus
,
willingness
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the willingness
a willingness
 to study is
also
 very important for
better learning experience
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a better learning experience
. In conclusion, Teachers and students are the two sides of the same coin and
therefore
 active and positive participation is the key to successful teaching rather than blaming anyone alone.

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