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More and more fathers are taking a break from their careers so that they can stay home and take care if their children while their wives work.This is better for the family than having both parents work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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In contemporary society, there are increasing husbands in their families choose to stay in to look after their children
instead
 of going out to work. Many people insist on the view that
this
 will help them build up a healthier
families
Suggestion
family
 than dual-career families. As far as I am concerned, I tend to agree with
this
 statement as the reasons below. On the one hand, in the gender-blind society, it is no longer necessary for men to assume the responsibility to pay for their families' living expense and their wives take care of the children at home.
Conversely
, it is not uncommon to see that many families are the other way round, because men
also
 have equal capacity as women to handle the household matters. Indeed,
this
 is not prevalent in some countries of different culture and religions, but it seems an unavoidable change in today's world.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that children need supervision from their parents after school. It can be seen that many children are fond of spending most of their spare time on playing video games and walking on the street with peers because both of their parents are absent from home.
As a result
, they will be easily influenced by inappropriate information from computers or socially acceptable activities
such
 as violence and drinking.
Therefore
, single-working families are
able
Suggestion
more able
 to deliver more proper supervision to their children than both-working families in terms of parenting. In conclusion, as the promotion of sexual equality, the phenomenon of
house-husband
a husband who keeps house while his wife earns the family income
househusband
 is understandable, and
this
 will creates benefit to the families because their children will be guided and controlled when they leave school.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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