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It is important to teach children to protect the environment as it is to teach them to read and write . To what extent do you agree with this statement ?

#children #environment
Industrial revolution
Suggestion
The industrial revolution
 has impacted the
environment
 in a very negative way. It is argued that children should be educated about
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 as they are taught how to read and write. I completely agree with
this
 opinion because survival of
human race
Suggestion
the human race
 is linked with
protection
 of
environment
 and childhood is the best
age
 to introduce environmental friendly
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Existence
Suggestion
The existence
 of human race on
this
 planet is dependent on the
protection
 of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.
Humans
Suggestion
Human
 actions
such
 as urbanization and emission of greenhouse gases by usage of fossil
fuels
Suggestion
fuel
 emission of greenhouse have led to adverse environmental conditions and climate change. There is a scientific consensus that if
this
 trend is not stopped or reversed by a change in human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 than it will end up in
complete extinction
Suggestion
the complete extinction
 of life on earth.
This
 is why
human behavior
Suggestion
the human behaviour
human behaviour
 should be guided towards
protection
 of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. Childhood is the best
age
 to educate human beings about the importance of
protection
 of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.
This
 is because ideas and
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 learned in
this
 early
age
 stay with a person for all his life.
For example
 a recent research that studied the mindset of young people that bought environmental friendly cars of Tesla are those who were taught about the carbon footprint in
there
of them or themselves
their
 early childhood. The result of
this
 study shows
importance
Suggestion
the importance
 of teaching children about the importance of keeping
environment
 human friendly. To conclude,
human being
Suggestion
the human being
a human being
need
Suggestion
needs
 to protect the
environment
 of
there
of them or themselves
their
 home planet as
there
of them or themselves
their
 survival is linked with it and childhood is the perfect
age
 to teach children the habits of protecting the
environment
.

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