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In many Countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of Crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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It is globally proven that
crime rate
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the crime rate
 is increasing day by day all around the world. I will express my views why the number of
crime
is rising
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has been rising
has risen
 lately.
Firstly
, the lack of education play a significant role in the rise of quantum of
crime
 henceforth a person with less educational qualities prone to commit
crime
 easily. He is not in
possition
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a position
position
opposition
 to take
right decision
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the right decision
 for himself and can be misguided by others with minimal efforts.
Secondly
, unemployment among people is at large responsible for growth in
crime
 rate. Those who committed the
crime
 find it
a
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an
 easier way to make money and tempted to get monetary benefits with little efforts. To conclude the essay, both lack of education and unemployment played a vital role in increase in
amount
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the amount
 of
crime
 recently. We must provide
such
 an environment in our society so that people with
inferior background
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an inferior background
 in education and jobs get proper monitoring.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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