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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, the living
sole
the immaterial part of a person; the actuating cause of an individual life
soul
soil
 has become prevalent among people especially who are living in metropolitan areas and
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 rate is far higher in developed countries. I believe
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 trend has more negative consequences than the few positive outcomes it offers.
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 with, it is argued that living lonely has a lot of benefits for people and their society. In terms of personality, the
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 reason why single occupants tend to live alone is that they can become a more independent person in their life. To illustrate, children who have to leave their parents to continue their studies in foreign countries, people are more independent than their peers because they have to do several things at the same time without getting help from their relatives.
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, single people are likely to attend more public social affairs. In fact,
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 type of people has a lot of time to participate in social activities and become a volunteer to help people who are living in deprived areas. From another angle, the trend of increasing single-person family has many drawbacks.
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, the growing willingness to live alone has a direct relationship
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 the percentage of people suffers from psychological problems
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 as isolation and depression. The statistics show that the number of depressed people
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has increased
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 all over these days, unlike the traditional family where there is always a warm atmosphere to share someone’s distress.
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, people in order to overcome their isolation choose a negative lifestyle. Accosting to a study, alone individuals often prefer to consume drugs
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Accept space
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, not only could not they reduce their mental disorders, but
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 they become addicted to drugs gradually. From what has been discussed,
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 living alone can improve people’s personality and e positive impact on their society, in my opinion,
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 trend will increase mental disease and they become addicted to harmful materials to reduce their problems.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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