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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. What is your opinion about this issue?

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Many people are considering travelling as one of the things to do in their bucket lists, and
as a result
 international travel has been on the increase lately.
This
 has had various advantages and disadvantages to the local countries and communities. In my opinion, an influx of tourists does more good than harm to the local citizens for the following reasons.
Firstly
, more foreigners travelling to a region would mean more circulation of money.
In other words
, foreigners will be purchasing things
such
 as food, clothes, and souve
niers whic
something of sentimental value
souvenirs
souvenir
h will ultimately benefit the local traders and shop owners in the form of higher profits. One of my uncles,
for example
, who owns a boutique, earns double the profits in December since it is the holiday season when compared to off-season months like in March.
This
 is why, I strongly believe that tourism is a great opportunity for the local companies and citizens.
Secondly
, a region's people get to meet people from all over the world in the name of tourism. To be specific, natives can learn and gain awareness about things like another
country
's language, food and national attire through tourists. One of my best friends,
for example
, is from Scandanavia whom had I met in a local coffee shop when she was visiting my home state. I learnt various things about Scandanavia, and it was so fascinating that I have decided to visit the
country
next
 month during my winter holidays. In my opinion, tourists teach so many things through their visit that can leave a positive long lasting impact in the natives' lives. In conclusion, it is my firm belief that travellers income to a
country
 is more advantageous to the local community. They bring in more trade and t
hereby, mor
Accept comma addition
and, thereby
e earnings for the local businesses.
In addition
 to it, local people
also
 get the opportunity to learn about the visitor's
country
 during their visit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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