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many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking.what are the reasons for this?are there more advantages than disadvantages?

Technology is one of the fastest growing sector in terms of revenue as well as inventing and enhancing. One of the finest inventions of the past two decades
are
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is
 the optimizations of the
text
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 messaging technology. Individuals tend to use the
text
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 messaging rather than talking to the other
person
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. In the following paragraphs we will discuss the reasons behind
this
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.
Firstly
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, making a call is generally for important and lengthy conversations,
such
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 as talking to a friend
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a
 year, workplace
discusssions
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussions
, talking to a family member to discuss family issues etc..
On the other hand
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,
text
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 messages are for short messages where you can avoid the awkwardness of wishing each other in the beginning to discuss the main content and you can take your
time
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 to type the messages. Another advantage is that the other
person
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 will not get to know your expressions in
text
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 messages as you can use emoticons now to add
any
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
 expression to your
texts whereas
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texts, whereas
 expressions should be taken care when we meet and talk or even if we are in
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the call
a call
.
Secondly
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, there is no
time
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 for anyone to arrange for a meeting and discuss simple things. Especially, in a group chat, we can talk to multiple people at once and we can share photos, videos, audios, stickers, etc.
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To
 the group at the same
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 and have a discussion. An Oxford University study states that 57% of love proposals in a College in Williams College
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is done
is made
 through
text
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 messaging. As mentioned above,
this
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 is the best way to avoid awkward situations and you will get enough
time
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 to think and reply with appropriate emotions.
However
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, there are some drawbacks like, we need some
time
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 to type and send a reply whereas calls will convey the same
message
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 in seconds. Sometimes, the content we type might have been taken
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on
 a different tone than what was intended.
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, if you are expressing
someting
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 and you want to know
other
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the other person's reaction
person
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's reaction,
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text
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a text message
message
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 may not convey true emotions just like a call does.
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, typing messages while doing some work is difficult and waiting for a long
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 for a reply is annoying. A study from Oxford University on blood pressure
levels says
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levels, says
 that a
person
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's blood pressure rate will increase by 3 points when he is waiting for an important
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message
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's reply for 30 seconds. So, to get
immediate reply
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an immediate reply
immediate replies
, always calls or meeting in
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are
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is
 the best. In conclusion, though there
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is
 some inconvenience in sending
text
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 messages, like we ignore the
person
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 sitting
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for
with
 us while texting, difficulty in understanding the tone of the
message
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, waiting for a reply etc., there are more advantages like group chat, taking
time
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 and replying, avoiding unwanted arguments etc..It is a useful technology, when used at the right place and mostly for a casual chat or for conveying short important messages. Using the same can be avoided when there is a need for formal and serious discussions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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