Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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It is true to say that some

people

argue that public

service

is good for easy

people

while

others believe that private vehicles

much

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better in

this

issue.

However

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my opinion, I firmly believe that the public system is excellent for making our

life

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lives

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easier and comfortable. There are many reasons why public

service

is excellent. First and foremost,

this

service

is good for poor

people

. Most of the

people

in our country are poor and they do not high paid

service

worker

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That is

the way they go

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from

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one place to another by bus or train at the cheapest cost.

Besides

this

service

gives another

service

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that the number of

people

travel at a

time

For example

, The New York Times recently published news that 82% of the

people

of Dallas city love to travel public

bus

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buses

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and

this

safe

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saves

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their

time

from traffic.

However

, sometimes it kills our valuable

time

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their personal or crucial schedule and makes us very disappointed.

On the other hand

, private

service

makes our life much easier and

comfortable

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more comfortable

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Initially

, it saves us

time

and management systems.

This

service

much

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is very

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comfortable and friendly and it is controlled fully in our mode.

For instance

, when we think

to join

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a party or family program, we prefer to go with private vehicles, it makes our social status as well.

Experienced

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, private system helps to increase oil and traffic jam as well. In conclusion, considering

the

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both views I firmly believe that

although

the private system is good, public

service

is excellent in

this

issue and

finally

the government considering some steps to maintain better

service

for their civilians.

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Improve the logical structure of the essay by organizing ideas in a more coherent way.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction and conclusion need to be more developed and well-connected to the rest of the essay.

task achievement

The response should fully address the prompt and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the topic.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

276 words

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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people think that the environment may be destroyed because of tourism. Others, however, believe that it is a way to preserve nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !

In some societies the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. What are the reasons for this trend? And what possible solutions could reduce this issue?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. !