Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

It is true to say that some
people
argue that public
service
is good for easy
people
while
others believe that private vehicles
much
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better in
this
issue.
However
,
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my opinion, I firmly believe that the public system is excellent for making our
life
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easier and comfortable. There are many reasons why public
service
is excellent. First and foremost,
this
service
is good for poor
people
. Most of the
people
in our country are poor and they do not high paid
service
worker
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.
That is
the way they go
to
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one place to another by bus or train at the cheapest cost.
Besides
,
this
service
gives another
service
is
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that the number of
people
travel at a
time
.
For example
, The New York Times recently published news that 82% of the
people
of Dallas city love to travel public
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and
this
safe
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saves
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their
time
from traffic.
However
, sometimes it kills our valuable
time
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their personal or crucial schedule and makes us very disappointed.
On the other hand
, private
service
makes our life much easier and
comfortable
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.
Initially
, it saves us
time
and management systems.
This
service
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comfortable and friendly and it is controlled fully in our mode.
For instance
, when we think
to join
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a party or family program, we prefer to go with private vehicles, it makes our social status as well.
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, private system helps to increase oil and traffic jam as well. In conclusion, considering
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both views I firmly believe that
although
the private system is good, public
service
is excellent in
this
issue and
finally
the government considering some steps to maintain better
service
for their civilians.
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