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The crime rate has actually increased due to the widespread use of technology? To what extent do you agree with this?

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In
this
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 era,
prelation
an abstraction belonging to or characteristic of two entities or parts together
relation
 of
technology
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 is
on
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at
 the peak, people driven their lifestyles with full of high tech devices. On the one hand, applied sciences made our life comfortable.
On the contrary
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,
crime rate
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the crime rate
 has
also
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 augmented in myriad number. Every thing has its own pros and cons. By the development of automation, almost everybody tends to a prisoner of the same. The preponderance are youngsters who involved in online frauds influenced by media and so on. I strongly agree with the aforementioned statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs. To initiate with,
internet
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the internet
 has spread his wings all over the world. As the dispersion of
technology
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, facilities are expanded and
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives are contributing to machine base lifestyle.
This
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 development leads to well established lives as well as
high crime rate
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a high crime rate
.
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,
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of crimes executed because of
internet
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the internet
 and media. Teenagers are very much impressed by the movies and perform most of activities based on the stories shown in the same.
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, one of the big online transaction fraud done in 2017 in Nigeria same as shown in movie “Fly high”. Criminals who does small crimes in the past and now accomplish as major convicts.
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, to conclude the discussion of can be
finally
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 said that the widespread use of
technology
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 provide of lots of benefits to people as in
such
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 a hectic schedule it helps in saving time as well as money, but advancement in
technology
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 has increased large number of crimes in almost all
age
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ages
 of people mainly in youngsters who are basically very much affect of media.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance systems
  • CCTV cameras
  • forensic technology
  • crime scene analysis
  • conviction rates
  • data analytics
  • predictive policing
  • high-risk areas
  • cybersecurity measures
  • cybercrime
  • sensitive information
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • emergencies
  • law enforcement response
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