Having more money and less free time is better than having less money and more free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is the actual
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situation, what
most of the individuals face. Most of them run behind earning and never think about free
time
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. And in other
hand there
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hand, there
are people who have a lot
free
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more free
time
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and not bothered about
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the
earnings.
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Actually, both
are
necesary
absolutely essential
necessary
a in common life. There are people who totally run behind earnings. They are not worried about the surroundings.
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attitude is actually
dangers
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
to them because
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they may lose the one around him/her. The people who run behind earnings will never go for any kind of
pleasuer
a fundamental feeling that is hard to define but that people desire to experience
pleasure
, they do full
time
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job.
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, they will forget
there
of them or themselves
their
family and loved once. The one who
love
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loves
to be rich, they are the most selfish
person
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. They will be behind finding ways to earn cash. If they become selfish
person
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then
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there won't be anyone close to them. Most importantly, they end up with committing some crimes. Even though, wasting
time
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is
also
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a impinge. Some of them spend
time
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without any reason and don't do any job. These people are least bothered about earning wealth.
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However
,
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is
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not a right thing. A
person
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should earn enough to get respect in the society.
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Also without
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Also, without
wealth a
person
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can't
servive
continue to live through hardship or adversity
survive
service
. He/she should earn for them self to get some respect and position in the society. For
intance
an occurrence of something
instance
, my uncle was
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a chad that has been punched or dimpled but all four corners are still attached
dimpling
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sitting at home for many years without any job and no one knows him. Few years
ego he
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ego, he
flied
run away quickly
fled
flew
flown
to foreign and started working there. After
thet
pointing out something
that
when he
make
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makes
a visit to home, people
whould
past tense of "will"
would
run to him
.
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.
This
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is how the actual world is. So to conclude, a
person
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should work for his day to day expenses not for the luxury life.
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, people should equally give
importence
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
for the free
time
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.
Therefor
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Therefore
,
its
it is
it's
important to earn money and have free
time
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in life. There should be
proper balance
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a proper balance
for it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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