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Some people think that the best way to reduce crimes is to apply longer prison sentences, other people think that there are better methods of doing so. Discuss both views.

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Bad situations
such
 as an
unsastisfy
not having been satisfied
unsatisfied
job
 or making less money happen all around
of
Suggestion
for
 us. Some people believe that it is important to accept negative circumstances when it
occurs whereas
Accept comma addition
occurs, whereas
 the others emphasise that it is better to seek solution in
this
situations
Suggestion
situation
. In my view I believe that being people who effort to make own
life
 better are more valuable
instead
 of giving up. If circumstances become
inresistable
impossible to resist; overpowering
irresistible
 it is better to try fixing the issues. It is frequently believed that no matter how difficult situation we can get out of it by finding another
job
 or asking for a raise when your income is not
enought
as much as necessary
enough
 for your
life
 quality. The key
can not
can not
cannot
 be
demanding
Suggestion
demanded
 salary
increase but
Accept comma addition
increase, but
also
 requesting from boss to be more effective at
job
 to feel good.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
there are numerous individual who has no energy to make a
job
 change and want to be stable. They might neither had terrible experiences
hence
 they prefer to struggle on with what they have or
life
 expectations are
minimum
Suggestion
minimized
 because of responsibilities.
For instance
, a man having a family has to
care
provide a cure for, make healthy again
cure
 them.
whereas
Suggestion
Whereas
 his single friends, he must work despite under pressure and low income. Whereas his single friends needn't do he must work despite under pressure and low income. The answer
is not quit
Suggestion
is not quitting
does not quit
doesn't quit
 the
job
 for him. The best way to move his
life
 that accept the circumstances and survive. In conclusion, althoug I agree that we should try to improve bad situations, I think that in some case it would be better to accept

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