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nowadays, The social media increasing . Do you agree or disagree?

#media
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From the 21th century
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The social media has been dramatically increasing until
now according
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now, according
 any range of people.Having seen status quo
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The adolescent have used sharing their personal information and pictures
yjay
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 using the
internet
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 have been rising
since
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for
 5 years.
On the other hand
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, Using the
internet
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 might be dangerous to the
teenjegers
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 future life career.Even though
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the crime rate has been increasing when it came
to
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into
 the world which it means the
internet
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 has side effects
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,
however
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 it has a good effect too.
For instance
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one of my friends always using
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internet
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the internet
 by to be acquainted to someone and easy to use
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but she has connected one guy and
then
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 they met at the
cafe but
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cafe, but
 it wasn’t him
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he was just
used
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using
handsome guy picture
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a handsome guy picture
handsome guy pictures
 in order to meet my friend.
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social media have acquired adults and
old
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older
 people.People often feel comfortable posting things on social media that they wouldn't say in real life.
This
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 can be
cause
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the cause
a cause
 of the incredibly bad habits to human life style. In some cases, social media has given people wrong
inspiration particularly
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inspiration, particularly
 Kim
kardashian
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Kardashian
 that some people believe that they are very beautiful
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amazing and
natural but
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natural, but
 they not due to the fact the is they did plastic surgery to their own body but they are promoting
product
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a product
products
the product
 that telling a lie to the whole world
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 As long as people are aware of the risks of using social media
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and are careful to post only respectful and before the sent your picture think about it.
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