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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people claim that in these days the significant problem of planet’s nature is losing some kinds of plants and animals.
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, others think that there are
more other important
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other more important
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the two given points
the given two points
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views, and
 my personal opinion about provided issue.
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, there are a lot of considerable reasons of decreasing animals’ and plants’ number. One of them is that
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 atmosphere is becoming worse and worse, and because of
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 problem, a big amount of living creatures
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has
 considerable decreasing.
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, in every
city there
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city, there
 are enough gas factories which spoil the environment.
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, on the street it could be seen a large number of different gas cars, and
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 is one of the main reasons too.
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The second reason
 is that due to using animals for different testing for humans’ benefits,
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 majority of animals suffer from the torment of experiments.
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, people use them for
the testing new
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testing the new
 types of cosmetics to find out allergic signs or other bad irritations.
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, because of all these testing suffer over 200 000 animals which leads to
dieing
in or associated with the process of passing from life or ceasing to be
dying
 and declining of their quantity. From the opinions’ of some people, nowadays there are other serious problems than provided before. Not only animals and plants have important extinction problems, but our citizens
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 have enough.
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 as decreasing of
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the people’s population year
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. Humanity
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has
 a lot of diseases from the same gas machines and works. As an example, lung cancer, heart disease, death, and other chronic diseases.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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