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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, it is true that genetic engineering is a modern scientific research over the all ages in order to change people's lives. In my opinion, I believe that it would bring various positive impacts on agriculture and health industry, whereas it could have damaging effects on people.
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 of all, one of benefits on farming is that crops would be improved through a variety of
techology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 for the purpose of
food
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 shortage. A good example for
this
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 is that researchers would use genetic
technology
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 to cultivate the
food
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 and people no longer have the chanced of starving or
worring
causing distress or worry or anxiety
worrying
 about
food
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 resources.
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 to the crops, there is an advantage on cloning organs, and by doing genetic engineering, scientists could create artificial organs for the patients who are waiting for
organs
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organ
transplantation
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transplants
.
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, I firmly believe that genetic engineering could help people change their life and extend the life expectancy.
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,
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 there are many merits
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of
 genetic
technology
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, it could have many negative impacts for people. There is growing evidence that we might not sure why kinds of potential causes would affect people's
body
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bodily
 health by using excessively genetic engineering. Yet, I have
though
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
 that the merits of genetic engineering would outweigh its drawbacks, not only would people live
more healtheir
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healthier
more healthy
, but
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 they would get rid of starving due to insufficient
food
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.
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, I strongly believe that researchers are dedicated to developing a wide rage of positive sites on genetic engineering, they would have capacity of reducing the negative impacts on people via genetic
technology
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. In conclusion, it is clear to see that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
on
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of
 genetic engineering. Providing that all prompt actions are taking into account on
this
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technology
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 before people take its benefits, the negative problems will be alleviated.

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