Nowadays young people lack an understanding of how to manage their finances after they finish high school. Explain why they do not know how to manage money and how this can be changed

It is
undoubtdly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
true that young people usually find it hard to manage their financial status as many many of them discovered
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss the reasons behind
this
troubling issue. There are
couple
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a couple
of reasons why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the youth face
this
problem
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Firstly
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Their lack of experience in real life after finishing their high school as they suddenly find themselves responsible for balancing between their income and expenses.
For example
, according to a local newspaper interview with a young working man who recently graduated
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he stated that he struggled for a long time until he was able to manage his
fiancies
imagine; conceive of; see in one's mind
fancies
finances
fences
;
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due to the fact that he never did anything similar before.
Secondly
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I find the school's
criculum
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
to be faulted as
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
focus on scientific data
,
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theortical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
theories and complicated
mathmatics
a science (or group of related sciences) dealing with the logic of quantity and shape and arrangement
mathematics
rather than implementing a real life
cases
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case
for the students to learn
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Moreover
, develop their brains to handle those situations
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This
was done in a set of schools in Egypt and all the students rated
this
class to be the best and they agreed that it helped them a lot in real life after graduation. Another important point to tackle is the way to change the current situation to avoid any more future problems. One of the tools to use is adding an internship period for students at a company that manages
fiancies
assets in the form of money
finances
fences
for people
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Consequently
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they learn the means necessary to manage their own situations.
This
was executed in a
highschool
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high school
in Orlando in the United States of America and it showed great results. To conclude, It may seem premature to the students to discuss financial
independability
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in dependability
and their responsibility to manage it.
However
, I
inclind
(often followed by 'to') having a preference, disposition, or tendency
inclined
incline
to
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that the
sooneer
comparatives of 'soon' or 'early'
sooner
they are
teached
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
about it the better their future will be.
Moreover
, both the educating and parenting parties should collaborate
transversly
in a transverse manner
transversely
to ensure the
upmost
of the greatest possible degree or extent or intensity
utmost
benefit regarding
this
matter.

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