Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This
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problems
Suggestion
problem
can be effectively tackled by the joint efforts of both teachers and parents.
Firstly
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, parents encourage children to involve family activities and motivate them to interact with their
garndparents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
, who have
the great
Suggestion
the greatest
amount of knowledge and wisdom.
This
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converastion
the use of speech for informal exchange of views or ideas or information etc.
conversation
would assist them to exchange knowledge between them, which means history and technology meet each other.
Therefore
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, parents required to find a common ground to initiate communication between these two groups. Regarding schools they can
also
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make some efforts. By giving assignments, which require some kind of interaction with older people, stimulate the youngsters to communicate with the
eldely
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
elderly
.
Evntually
Suggestion
Eventually
, teach them what is the significance of grandparents in the present generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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