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Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #programmes #study #post #tv #internet #home #benefit #colleges #universities
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In the
last
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 decade,
distance
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 learning
is becoming
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has become
 increasingly popular. While some people think studying through the internet, or TV is as
good
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well
 as colleges, others believe it does not provide the same level of
education
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. In my opinion,
distance
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 learning is not as
good
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well
 as formal
education
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, due to the fact that formal
education
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 provides other essential aspects to the student, which are not available
elswhere
in or to another place
elsewhere
.
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 In the following essay, I will provide arguments and examples to support my view. One of the main advantages of formal
education
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 is the ability to learn from other students. When students sit in the classroom, debating on a specific question, like the Israeli Palestinian conflict or the UK's desire to leave the European Union, they learn new thoughts and ideas not only from their teacher, but
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 from their classmates.
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, students who attend school are exposed to substantially more opinions and ideas than students who study at home. Another argument in favour my opinion, is that
distance
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 learning prevents students from asking questions during class. When a physics student,
for example
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, is unable to ask the teacher about a formula during class, he might be unable to fully understand the lecture. As a consequence, the student might not know the required material, which can
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 his overall grade and knowledge. In conclusion, I maintain that
distance
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 school is not as good as attending a university or college, because it
prevets
keep from happening or arising; make impossible
prevents
 students from hearing new
idease
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
ideas
 from other classmates, as well as having the ability to ask questions during class. Despite the fact that
distance
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 learning is comfortable, it is not a better way to educate our children.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • independence
  • communication
  • interaction
  • academic resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • hands-on experience
  • peer support
  • time management
  • procrastination
  • motivation
  • feedback
  • structured learning environment
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