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Most scientific inventions and discoveries are worthless and only waste of time and money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#inventions #discoveries #waste #time #money
It is a fact that we are living in the most advanced technological era
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which is the result of past researches and discoveries.Though some may opine that the research process is mere wastage of time and money, I consider it as the key to a better world. There are ample reasons to argue that researches play a pivotal role in shaping the world today.
Firstly
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the researches in the field of physics and chemistry had led to the development of many of the facilities that we are enjoying today.May it be electricity
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transportation, infrastructure, all
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were
 the products of researches conducted long back in the 1800s.
Secondly
 the advancements in the health sector by which some of the deadly diseases in the past like leprosy
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small pox are completely eradicated from the society and many ailments like tuberculosis, measles, hepatitis are brought under control through vaccination.
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 the advancements in the field of communication
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by which we are able to see and hear a person in the other corner of the planet, has brought the world into a single global market. The flourishing technology makes everything at the finger tip
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 Though the technological advancements and research studies are the cornerstones of development
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many nations are spending large amounts of money for researches that are not beneficial to the society, which includes
researches
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Researches
 in the
fieds
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
fields
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 of nuclear weapons,
war planes
an aircraft designed and used for combat
warplanes
 and so on. So in my opinion researches should be promoted, but it should be with an aim of making the society a better place to liv
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,improving our health and not for destroying the mankind
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endeavours
  • fruitless
  • extravagant
  • foundation
  • drastically
  • evaluate
  • solely
  • disregards
  • breakthroughs
  • offset
  • expenditures
  • acknowledging
  • collective understanding
  • guides
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