The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1
The bar chart illustrates the expenditure on various categories of entertainment in three continents Asia, Europe and
United
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the United
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States over a
five- year
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five-year
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period from 1995 to 2000.
Overall
, from the
beginning
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the amount spent on television and publishing was fluctuating, but throughout the period they were the highest source of entertainment.
On the contrary
, the least money was expended on cinema and video in all the continents. In
the
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Asia a total of 67
units
was expended on
the
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amusement with television and publishing being the highest and cash spent on video and cinema
was
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the least.
However
, in 2000 the sum
has
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increased rapidly by almost 43units with a rise of about
20units
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20 units
paid out on music when compared to the former year.
Whereas
in
the
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Europe,
97units
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97 units
was
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the grand total squandered on leisure,
while
a sharp expansion of
34units
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34 units
(
131units
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131 units
)
on
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a whole was splurged on relaxation by 2000.
Finally
, the United
Stated
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was disbursing the highest amount from the beginning till the end
on
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in
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contrast to Asia and Europe with 184
units
in 1995 and has crossed 250
units
in five years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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