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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
With advancement in technology, online stores are gaining popularity among the masses.
Growing number
Suggestion
A growing number
 of people are making their purchases using these e-commerce websites rather than visiting the stores. It is widely believed that
this
 trend shall force many retail outlets to shut down in the future. I share the same opinion as them.
This
 essay shall cover reasons as to why we might not be seeing any shops in times to come. The fierce competition and struggle to meet ends makes it difficult to take out
time
 to go visit a store.
Also
, with the rapid growth in world population the issue of congestion has surfaced which increases the
time
 of reaching the place and locating a parking spot. Buying stuff through the internet saves
time
 and hustle of visiting the shop. To elaborate
this
 point, if one has to select a pair of Zara Jeans, you just go to the Zara online store, scroll down, select and make the payment. It takes only five minutes of
time
 and a few clicks
on
Suggestion
of
 the mouse!
Moreover
, the internet is progressing each day, e-commerce companies are trying to bring all consumer needs and wants on the same place. To illustrate
this
, websites like Alibaba allow you to buy clothes, tyres, tools, crockery,
etc
informal term for a meal
eats
 everything
on
Suggestion
at
 the same place. On
contrary
Suggestion
the contrary
, making choices in the traditional manner means you go to each and every shop and
then
 spend some more
time
 and energy in making choices. In conclusion, data in a number of countries show the adoption rate of
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is very high.
For instance
, in Pakistan traffic on
such
 websites have grown three folds in the past couple of years. I strongly agree that soon retail outlets shall not be seen anymore.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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