Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

Nowadays, advertisement has become a very popular way of
show casing
a setting in which something can be displayed to best effect
showcasing
new products. Some people argue that
this
trend has lead a
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trend has led to a
trend has led a
lot of people
to
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into
buying thing they do not need, others believe it is the best way to reach out to inform people about a
product
that could be beneficial to the public. I will discuss my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
in
this
essay.
Firstly
, any new
product
weather good or bad must get to the market. So
advertisement
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the advertisement
is very important for any
product
to reach a wider market. In the process of advertising these products the companies generally describe what these
product
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products
are and what they can do for people so the question of buying
irrelevant
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an irrelevant product
product
which is not needed becomes relative.
For instance
, if a
product
is met to improve hair growth and advertised as
such it
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such, it
should not be used for other purpose.
Secondly
, if we continue to argue
on
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with
the fact that people buy irrelevant things because of glorious advertisement about a
product
that point will become weak when we look at the role of many regulatory organizations now in place in many countries. These
organization
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organizations
tends
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tend
to now check all the excessive glory many companies give to their products.
Infact
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In fact
, these companies are made to put a
caveat if
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caveat, if
necessary on these products.
For example
, for drug related products - certain regulatory agencies
puts
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put
a restriction on exaggerated efficacies of some products.
This
is
also
true for some
product
like cigarettes where the public is
also
made to understand the harmful effects of
such
products. In conclusion, I strongly support that new
products
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product
that will be beneficial to the public be advertised to create awareness and improve the lives of people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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