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People have differed regarding whether mobile phones should be banned in public place or not. Those who support the ban argue that by doing

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our public places become more safe and secure. Especially during the time of emergency, it would help both the police and medical personnels to locate the victim, when they call, as

this

phone can be easily traced by the assistance of GPS.

Moreover

, currently, public telephone booths are on the verge of extinction.

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small piece of equipment is considered as multitasking device, which can do many jobs at a time.

This

helps the people to carry a single device in the place of many gadgets. Opponents of the above arguments point out that

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mobile phones can be used to take pictures and videos, it might consider as an intrusion of others privacy.

Similarly

, when using these in the places: hospitals, airports and diagnostic centres,

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responsive to physical stimuli

sensitive

instruments get malfunctioned. If in the case of emergency, there are many public booths are available around us that can be used.

Finally people

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Finally, people

get easily distracted from when others talking on the phones, which can lead to road accidents, lack of

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concentration

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in works, which means people’s life may

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be in

a dangerous situation until cell phone are prohibited in the public places.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

214 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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