Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:  Say why you would like to go on the trip  Suggest what you could do to help during the trip  Ask other questions about the trip

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Hello Rohan Sir, I am writing

this

letter to ask you about the trip that you are planning for my son and other children to another country, and I would like to join the tour. I have heard from my son that the school has planned to take their students to Australia. I

also

got to know that you are searching for parents who can accompany you

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the travel. In that regard, I would like to join

this

outing because I have been in Australia for my business journey and I know many things about its locals. If you allow me to join the group,

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will be

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helpful to take care of one group of children and handling their belongings. I would like to ask you about the exact date of arrival and departure so that I can take leaves in my office

accordingly

. Please share accommodation and expenditure details for the trip. I am very excited about

this

trip and hoping for a positive reply from you.

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sincerely,

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

173 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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