The older people who need employment have to compete with younger ones. What problems can this create? What are some solutions?

Nowadays, more and more people prefer to use mobiles, some consider

this

as a negative development; others think that it has many benefits as well. In my opinion, I consider, using mobile phones can bring more advantages than any bad influence it might cause. On the one hand, those who believe that mobile phones are evil point out that,

this

can tarnish both family relationships and friendships.

This

is because nowadays, people’s screen time has increasing; mobile phone users prefer to communicate with online friends rather than real life relationships.

This

Suggestion

Thus

, even causes problems in their

work place

a place where work is done

workplace

as well, due to lack of concentration, they may not be able to complete their assignments on time. Apart from

this

, because of the veil of anonymity, conversations in the chat rooms and

dicussion

an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic

discussion

platform often offensive.

Finally

, sometimes

this

can be used to spread false information and propaganda to tarnish

somones’

a human being

someones

life purposefully.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

152 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Technological advancements
Skills gap
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Industry preferences
Pension expenditure
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Employability
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