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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think that it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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It is argued that more capital should be invested in safeguarding the
species
 which are close to
extinction
, while others believe that it is a misuse of worthy money.
This
 essay disagrees that protecting endangered
species
 is a waste of valuable funds as humankind has a big responsibility on its shoulders to protect the wild animals on the verge of facing
extinction
 and the allocation of funds can be wisely planned. The protection of wild animals must be a basic responsibility for humanity.
Firstly
, every living being on the planet is equally important to maintain ecological balance.
This
 is to say that the ecosystem is well balanced with the existence of all
species
 on earth. If the endangered
species
 are not protected,
this
 could lead to an ecological crisis.
For example
, if Japan did not halt whale hunting
this
 could result in the
extinction
 of whales and which in return would create a huge impact on ocean life and fish stocks, on which many people depend for a living. Smart expenditure of funds is very crucial when we have a tough economic crisis. The wildlife reserves could be a solution to
this
 phenomenon, where wild animals will have a safe habitat and at the same time, these wildlife reserves or sanctuaries could generate income from visitors.
This
 could
also
 generate jobs, revenue and protect wild animals from poaching.
For example
, the Gir national park was originated to protect the endangered West Bengal tigers, which were close to facing
extinction
 due to poaching. Now there is an exponential rise in the number of tigers as they are in a protected environment and
this
 National Park has the most numbers of visitors in the country. In conclusion, the red list of endangered
species
 should be the main interest of mankind to maintain an ecological balance on earth and creative solutions should be encouraged to plan the economic resources which protect the wildlife and benefit the governments.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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