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Some people make new friends on social sites and Internet chat rooms.Some people think it is a good thing .Some people think it is better to make friends face to face.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Obviously, there are many reasons why
traffic
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 congestion is increasing day by day.
Firstly
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, nowadays, several people own personal vehicles as
this
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 becomes affordable; eventually, fewer passengers use public transport compared to 50 years ago, so
this
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 c
reats
make or cause to be or to become
creates
traffic
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 congestions in most of the cities. Another point to t
aken
Suggestion
take
into account is that, the i
nfratructures
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructures
in the cities may not be c
onstucted
make by combining materials and parts
constructed
to a
ccommmodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
this
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 massive influx of vehicles.
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, the same opening and closing time of the working places cause peak rush time congestion.
However
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, increased problems of
traffic
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 can be tackled by implementing certain strategies and steps. One possible method is that building more under and over passages, where
traffic
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 is severely hurt.
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, imposing c
arbon tax
Suggestion
a carbon tax
carbon taxes
on people who owns private vehicles can motivate them to opt public transport, If
this
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 facility able to meet people’s expectation by providing better seating a
rrengements,
the thing arranged or agreed to
arrangements
arrangement
 reliability, and punctuality. Apart from
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,
Accept space
,
encourage travellers to use b
icycle
Suggestion
bicycles
as
this
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 both environmentally and physically friendly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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