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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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Nowadays an increasing number of tourists
are preferring
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prefer
 to travel to remote destinations like the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic where the climates are extreme.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of visiting
such
 places. While a lot of commercial tourist destinations have evolved keeping in mind the comforts of the visitors, somewhere they have lost their originality and rawness.
Travelers
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Travellers
 seeking to experience something real would prefer locations like the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. The thought itself of visiting places that are yet to be explored completely is thrilling compared to planning a vacation to a commercialized destination. The major advantages of travelling the less travelled path
is adding
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are adding
 new experiences to your life that are not so common and the adventure around it. One can create interesting videos and write blogs about their adventurous trip.
However
, it takes guts to walk on the less travelled path because it may have disadvantages that one would not be able to predict like survival in extreme climatic conditions may affect your health. Because these places are not where many people live, in unfortunate
circumstances you
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circumstances, you
 may not find professional help around you.
Also
, one cannot plan for trips to
such
 locations with their children or elderly people in their family. To
conclude I
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conclude, I
 would say, while it is adventurous to visit
such
 locations, what one should not forget is that it is equally risky and if you really want to go for it you should research about the place, find out whether you are physically fit to go on
such
 trips and
lastly
 be prepared to face difficult situations.

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