some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of the most conspicuous trend of today's era is the colossal upsurge of kids spending quality time on watching television and playing computer games rather than reading stories in books, because of the importance they are getting by the society has been
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debated
, but now it has become more controversial with many people claiming that reading stories in books is useful for their future end overs. The substantial influence of
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trend has sparked the controversy over the potential impact in recent years
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First
and foremost, they are myriad of reasons which will
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explain the arguments, but on the most preponderant one stem of the fact
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through book reading toddles can easily
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the story and related to their studies
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their IQ levels are increased a lot and impacted on their studies. As per a recent survey conducted by the
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university in Japan schools,
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day
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spend
one hour of reading stories,
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easily solve
have easily solved
the problems in very less time.
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, while reading stories automatically improve the vocabulary from their
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childhood, hence
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it's easy to understand the different topics about the world and every day life.
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books, therefore
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