some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the most important aim science should be to improve peoples lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

you are taking a course at a local collage. the deadline for your project was last week but you have not finished it. write a letter to lecturer. introduce yourself explain why you have not handed in the project yet. request more time to do it.