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In many countries, women and men are working full time .it is there fore logical for men and women to share household tasks.to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Needless to emphasize, in many cities around the world now it is a practice that
both
 men and women started to
work
 equally. A lion's share of society agues that house chore should be shared between them. I completely concur with
this
 belief and the following sections of the essay will expand my reasons in support of
this
 notion. Indeed the group activity or shared
work
 definitely would help the people to complete the task easily.
Moreover
, it would reduce the workload.
For example
, in a working family by
both
 couples are doing their household works
such
 as cooking, cleaning, gardening and so on would enhance the sense of caring as well as supportive
mentality
Suggestion
mental
.
Therefore
 the stress due to household chore could be reduced and the task would carry-out easily. Yet another advantage of the shared
work
 approach would help to save
time
. These days due to the tight
work
 schedule
both
 names and females might become tired after duty and not have enough
time
 to do housing tasks. It is difficult for one person to carry out the whole
chores
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
course
. To illustrate, if one member of the family, especially women taking care of all works means she would definitely become late for
next
 day duty. Since
both
 couples are participating in completing housework would eliminate the
time
 shortage.
Therefore
, they would not delay their job. By dint of the aforementioned argument, I believe it is good to share all household tasks to reduce stress due to workload and to save
time
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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