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children in many countries are eating more fast food and convenience snacks. Why are children doing this and how serious are the consequences?

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If you travel to almost any city of the world you can see western-style fast
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 outlets serving burgers, pizzas, coffee, fried chicken and sandwiches. Children enjoy
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food
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;
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, their parents are not supervising them very carefully.
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 essay will try to explain why and assess some of the consequences. Why are children eating more fast
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? A key reason is the
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 larger number of fast
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 restaurants.
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, children in some countries have more pocket money to spend and seem to associate fast
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 with international culture.
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, young people are affected by peer pressure so, if fast
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 is seen as "cool",
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 eating it helps them to be accepted by others. As it is often children who eat fast
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, we can ask why parents don't control their kids' eating habits a little more. Possibly, parents today are working harder and longer and don't talk with their children about
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the event of dying or departure from life
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, they have to deal with a lot of pressure from children who are frightened of seeming 'different' from classmates. Added to
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, in some societies, parents no longer use strong discipline, and find it hard to resist the powerful advertising images which fast
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 companies use. The consequences are really serious,
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. Eating fatty
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 frequently can cause obesity in some children, and it may mean an unbalanced diet, with too much processes and sweet
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. As adults, children might experience health problems like diabetes.
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, by eating fast
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 regularly, children get used to spending money too easily.
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 could create poor money management in adulthood. Parents should think through the consequences of letting their children eat fast
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. It is not just a question of diet; there is
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 a threat to cultural values and eating traditions. Traditional diets may not be fashionable, but they are healthy and worth protecting.
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