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Some people think universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of keeping a balance between the number of female and male students in universities has been discussed by many.
Although
 some say
such
 a policy should be implemented in all subjects, others, including me, believe that it is not beneficial. Admitting a similar number of students from each
gender
 in some courses will probably render many of them unable to find a job later.
For example
, most areas of agriculture are too burdensome for almost any women in that they involve heavy physical activities and their working environment is affected significantly by the elements.
Therefore
, it is unlikely for a woman to be able to find a farming job once she has graduated in, say, agricultural engineering.
Besides
,
such
 a policy would definitely bar many talented and enthusiastic applicants from studying their favourite courses merely because there may not be enough students of the opposite sex to join the course. Some people think that accepting similar numbers of male and female students in all subjects promotes
gender
 equality. Breaking the social taboos attached to studying courses that are usually prescribed to specific
gender
.
However
, forcing students to study something they may not like, or stopping others from studying what they like in order to keep a balance does not seem fair at all, social taboos are not broken in the short term either, and it is more probable that the students who study in fields that are taboo for their
gender
 are rejected and sidelined in the process. In conclusion, I personally disagree, with accepting an equal number of boys and girls in any subject at university since it can complicate finding a job later and promote
gender
 bias, stopping enthusiastic applicants from entering the courses they like because of their sex.
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