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Science is advanced so fast that it can now make it possible for people to live 100 years or even 200 years. Some people think it is beneficial, while others think it will cause problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Rapid advancement in science can prolong life of an individual up to 200 years. According to some people, it's good in the sense that intellectuals will live longer and will be available for the benefit of mankind, whereas some are of the opinion that it will enhance the issues due to increased number of evil persons. In my opinion, I agree with the former concept as intelligent people will have more productive years. On the one hand, average life span increases due to technological advancements and has a positive impact on society as scholars will have a long life and I
also
 support
this
 idea.
This
 will lead to more innovations as scientists and scholarly people will have more time available for new inventions.
For example
, if Newton would have lived longer than he would have discovered new principles in physics. So, all
this
 will ultimately help in the progress and prosperity of human beings.
On the other hand
,
as a result
 of extended ages due to scientific boom, population with evil intentions will
also
 increase.
This
 will have a negative impact as crimes like theft, fraud and kidnapping will be more prevalent. All
this
 affects the peace and tranquility of our motherland. The same issue has been reflected in the study carried out by the Europeans, where the crime rate has doubled due to the involvement of more persons. So,
this
 will have a negative impact on us due to increased crimes. To conclude, I am of the view that it's beneficial to have more age due to scientific progress as it will lead to more availability of intellect of scientists for the prosperity of mankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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