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In many countries there is a problem with dec lining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

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Most of the countries around the world are fighting with the diseases from the impurities in
air
 and
water
. The major reasons of polluting
air
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the air
 and
water
 is
industry
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an industry
 and construction. There are
number
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a number
 of
solution
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solutions
 which can be proved helpful to overcome
this
 problem and I will shed light on these in the subsequent paragraphs. To start with, when it comes to the solution the
first
 and foremost which comes to mind is
development
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the development
 of the
industries
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Industries
 in the places where
population
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the population
 is less. With
this
, the waste which is responsible for the degradation of the quality of both
air
 and
water
 will be proved less harmful for the people. For an example, in many parts of the world like UK, USA the establishment of industries are not
near the residing
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residing near the
 places of individuals.
Further
, there should be possible steps taken by the government of
particular area
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a particular area
particular areas
 to encourage the sewage system near by the industries.
This
 step will definitely help to protect the
water
 and
waterbodies
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water bodies
 from the harmful results of the waste products. To prove, waste will not mix with
water
 in the rivers.
Further
, construction and industries are proving toll on the environment. To save the environment and to have clean
air
 to breathe, it is inquisitive to take one more efficient step, which is there should be quality control check by the ruling parties of the countries. Some rules and regulations should be implemented like if pollution is more from any industry,
then
 that industry should be stopped from working. In crux, the number of solutions cannot work altogether and as one should need to pick an effective and useful method to deal with the nub of the problem.

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