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Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves.Some people think that it is good thing, while others think that it has disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a controversial issue as to whether institutions should hire different types of sports as a means of advertising their products, which brings myriads of benefits, or, whether if goods of organizations display on the sports ground, it will reduce selling the item and the
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 as well. From my perspective, advertising various brands of the organization might bring a positive outcome rather than negatives.
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 with, numerous companies, these days, advert their items like sports accessories during the sporting event.
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, the products of the business tycoon
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sells
 easily since customers know about an item before purchasing through ads.
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, in the USA, a famous brand of sports shoes named APEX bombards one after other advertisements on TV, even in the playground, because people can easily observe signboards of APEX's shoes.
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, as business organizations provide money to the sports event organization and
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 to telecast their brands in front of the audience, they earn a tripled profit not only
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 customers of their brands but
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 from the organizing committee.
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, doing sponsor of any sports is a profitable task for the organization.
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 the lights of different cameras focus on the advertisers' products, at times, clients get confused to buy the same item of various brands. To illustrate, like the USA, top-rated APEX
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, who broadcasts their products in the World Cup tournament, while other brands
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 as Bay, 'Rose Garden' display their items on the same event. For that reason, the public cannot choose the quality products because of confusion, which eventually, could lead the
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 to bear the loss for decreasing in selling.
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, companies remain on strain for selling their products and gaining other subsidies from events.
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 pressure shows drawbacks all the time. In conclusion, though some people believe that if companies sponsor sports will get into traps for the shortcomings that emerge from events, the benefits are more than drawbacks as the
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 may sell their goods and gain profit a lot.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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