Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

technological advancements
constant connectivity
job demands
work-related stress
societal pressure
achieve success
erosion
work-life balance
exposure
negative news
social media comparisons
chronic stress
mental health support
stigma
flexible work hours
stress management techniques
mindfulness
access to mental health services
community support systems
emotional support

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Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?

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In some cities, people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is Which development do you think is better?replacing cars. Why is this the case?

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Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important to a child’s development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?