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Learning English language at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

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Language
 is a way to communicate with other people and tell your ideas. English is one of the most essential
language
 in the world nowadays. The local
language
 is
also
a
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an
 important
language
 in our lives. In my opinion learning English is important to everyone and local
language
 is
also
 equally important to everyone.
Firstly
, English is the official
language
 spoken by many countries in the world
such
 as US, UK, Canada and so on. Learning English in school is very important because the students will get command on that
language
. To get any job in the world English is very important skill
to
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of
 the person. Many people want to go abroad for higher education, so the English
language
 is very important to those people. To get any information from
internet
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the internet
 the websites are almost in English
language
.
However
, I feel that local languages are
also
 important to the people. Many books like Ramayana, Mahabharata etc., are written in local languages. By reading
those
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these
 books the people get so much knowledge about our traditions, local languages are taught from when they are kids because many of the local languages are mother tongue.
In
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At
 home with
parents they
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parents, they
 can speak in
local
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the local language
local languages
language
 because some parents cannot understand
English
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the English language
language
, so, in my view local
language
 is
also
 important to the people. To conclude, I believe that English is necessary to succeed in their career life and local
language
 is important to get outside knowledge and they can know about our traditions. I feel there is an equal effort for both English
language
 and
local
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the local language
language
.
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