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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: *Explain the situation *Describe why it bothers you *Suggest a solution

#apartment #year #neighbour #noise #landlord #*explain #situation #*describe #*suggest
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that
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 have been living in your
apartment
 building for the past few years. My name is Alex and
apartment
 no.115. As you know new tenants just moved into
apartment
 number 116 and have been making a lot of noise and playing music at a high volume.
Firstly
, I am a college student and my exams are coming on the next month and it is so hard for me to put my concentrate on my studies because of
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 noise coming from new neighbours. I have tried 3 times to contact them and leave a note about
this
 issue on their door but I didn't get any response from them. I would like to request you please solve
this
 issue or I can move my
apartment
 to the 2nd floor. I am paying all the security fees and rent on time. Kindly, please take
this
 matter into consideration and help me to come to a resolution. I hope to hear from you soon. Kind regards, Alex
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Ensure you introduce your letter appropriately with a brief overview of the purpose. While your greeting is sufficient, a single sentence summarizing the letter’s purpose could enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
To improve your coherence, try to group related ideas together more clearly. Though your ideas are generally well-organized, using transition phrases or markers could enhance the flow.
coherence cohesion
For cohesion, make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. You've done fairly well, but adding phrases like 'Furthermore,' or 'In addition to this,' at the beginning of new paragraphs can improve readability and connection between ideas.
task achievement
To further meet the task achievement criterion, elaborate on why the noise specifically affects your studies. Mentioning specific studies or types of work that are impacted can make your argument stronger.
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Consider using a slightly more formal tone of writing, while keeping the friendly approach. Avoid contractions ('I am' instead of 'I'm') and ensure proper punctuation to maintain professionalism compatible with writing to a landlord.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tenant
  • landlord
  • disrupt
  • mutual respect
  • soundproofing
  • noise pollution
  • accommodate
  • mediation
  • amicable resolution
  • constructive dialogue
  • disturbance
  • consideration
  • prompt resolution
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