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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems to increase the costs of fuels. Do agree or disagree?

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These days, people are not getting clean surroundings and fresh air to breathe from smoke released from vehicles and other. They are suffering from various health related problems. Individuals believe that the best possible solution to overcome
this
 problem is by increasing the cost of fuels. Personally, I am not completely in favour of latter notion. To make strong my opinion, I will discuss my views in the subsequent paragraphs. To start with, nowadays population is more concerned about the status symbol above
environment
. They want to show it by adopting any method. For an example, in a family of three to four members, all are having their personal transportation. Eventually,
this
 results in huge pollution from the fumes and disturbing the
environment
. By increasing the amount of petrol and diesel, the usage of cars and motor will be ultimately less.
Hence
, the degradation of
environment
also
.
Further
, the industries and factories running on fuels will
also
 put more emphasize on
savings
Suggestion
saving
 expenditure and
this
 will help to save the
environment
 from the gases which are released from the chimneys.
However
, the increase in amount of fuels will not only be the effective method to reduce the problems of pollution. There is need to adopt the other effective methods
also
 to solve the problems effectively.
Firstly
, there is
need
Suggestion
a need
 to bring awareness among the people about the importance of
environment
.
This
 can be done by relating the hazardous diseases like asthma with the polluted air.
Secondly
, there is need to encourage the pool system. By
this
 method
also
,
number
Suggestion
the number
 of vehicles will be reduced on the roads. There is
need
Suggestion
a need
 to adopt
such
 methods because, if the price will be increased
then
 it would be difficult to purchase the fuel for the people when it is needed. In crux, no doubt inflation would
work but
Accept comma addition
work, but
 not in
a
Suggestion
an
 effective way. There is need to understand the importance and requirement of the clean
environment
.
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