The graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph shows  the proportion of four different materials that were recycled that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The graph illustrates the volume of
paper
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and
cardboard
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,
glass
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containers
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, aluminium cans and plastics, which were recycled
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1982 to 2010 in one country.
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, the amount of recycling
paper
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and
cardboard
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and
glass
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containers
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have
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fluctuated,
while
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the percentages of recycling of aluminium cans and plastics were rising significantly. In 1982, about 65% of
paper
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and
cardboard
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were recycled.
This
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figure fluctuated before rising sadly to 80%.
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,
this
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figure declined dramatically in 2010 by 70%
Glass
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containers
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were recycled by 50% in 1982. After 1982, the rate of recycling
glass
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containers
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decreased slightly and reached 40% in 1988, which increased sharply until 2010 and reached 60%, which
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near to the percentage of recycling
paper
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and
cardboard
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. Aluminium cans were first-time recycled in 1984 at 5%, but
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that it rose swiftly and it has reached 35%
at the end
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of the period.
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, plastic has recycled at a rate of 2% in 1988, which grew constantly for the whole time and it
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reached 7%, which was the lowest recycling rate in comparison to the three other materials.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, glass, containers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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