hese days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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The type of content being watched on

televeision

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television

or computer by a person has a

longlasting

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influence on their psyche. The effect will be even more profound if the viewers are in

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the initail

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initail

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initial

years of their growth and development. Many behavioural studies have reported that movies,

vedio

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video

games, cartoons and

serials

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series

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copuld

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could

have a significant impact on the personality of a child.

Although

positive

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message is being

deliverd

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delivered

by many many media houses, the amount of

voilence

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violence

the amount of

voilence

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violence

that

has been

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shown on

televison

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television

is rising day by day. Displaying

voilence

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violence

small

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a small

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screen has negative effects on

fragile

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the fragile

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brains of children. it is being reported in many psychological studies that children who are habitual of watching cartoons and movies related to the action and

thril

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thrill

genre

were

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are

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more likely to develop

agressive

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aggressive

personalities in their adulthoods;because

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apply

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act

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as a stimulus for their

conciousness

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consciousness

which make them

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apply

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consider spilling

blood

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the blood

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of others as a way of making them

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apply

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give up to their legal and illegal demands.

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, it

also

increase

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increases

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frusteration

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frustration

in the personalities of viewers

consequently

making them angry and intolerant

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others

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others'

other's

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percpectives

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perspectives

. Agression and poor

behavious

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behaviours

behaviour

not only

effect

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affect

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childhoods

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the childhoods

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of those children but

also

have

significant

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a significant

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impact on their

peronalities

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personalities

teenages

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teenage

and

adulthoods

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adulthood

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. For many years, different

case

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cases

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of gun-shootig at different

pulic

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public

places including mosques and

eduction

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education

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institutes

een

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been

reported all

arround

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around

the world. in those

case

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cases

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, most of the culprits were found to be in

thier

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their

teenage and infatuated with the pride of superiority, which

make

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made

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them

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apply

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take

lives

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the lives

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of others.

Besides

these prominent cases of public killing, many young adults become a part of

a street gangs

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street gangs

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and start practising

henious

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heinous

crimes.

Eventhough

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Even though

there are many other factors which can be the reason

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for

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their miss-leaded life,

according to

cognative

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cognitive

studies

voilent

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violent

content, which was being watched in their childhoods, has a profound impact on their

peronalities

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personalities

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, it

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cann

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can

e concluded that

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should be refrained from watching any content unsupervised.

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hese days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Many countries are experiencing population growth, and need to build more homes. Some say that new homes should constructed in existing cities while others argues that new towns should be built to accommodate the growing population. What are the advantages and disadvantages of these point of view

Some people believe that no one should be allowed to continue working after the age of 65. However, others say there shouldn’t be a limitation on age, and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both views, give your opinion and include relevant examples.

Describe a time when you were extremely happy. What happened?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful. At persuading used to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.