These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In these modern times, with access
of
Suggestion
to
television to everyone, children are exposed to an increasing magnitude of
violence
Use synonyms
which is morphing their innocent natures into something feral. I agree that todays children have become normalized to
violence
Use synonyms
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of their
gullotinous
given to excess in consumption of especially food or drink
gluttonous
glutinous
gelatinous
consumption of electronic media. The entertainment industry
also
Linking Words
capitalizes on human nature for thrill and adventure by churning out adrenaline inducing
content
Use synonyms
for the masses
day
Use synonyms
after
day
Use synonyms
. Our News industry is
also
Linking Words
to blame that they would spread out news of
violence
Use synonyms
, discontent and disaster as it garners more views compared to a milder topic. Most of
this
Linking Words
content
Use synonyms
is easily accessible to anyone and of any age, even if there are restrictions of age they are easy to bypass. The result of being exposed to
such
Linking Words
violence
Use synonyms
is that the infant mind conceptualizes and accepts
violence
Use synonyms
as part of daily life. The exponential rise in school shootings in America is an effect of
this
Linking Words
. Bullying is increasing
day
Use synonyms
by
day
Use synonyms
. Cases of
agression
a disposition to behave aggressively
aggression
and mental health are ever more
prevailent
most frequent or common
prevalent
.
This
Linking Words
culture of
violence
Use synonyms
promotes more
violence
Use synonyms
as the children grow up to be adults producing violent
content
Use synonyms
for the
next
Linking Words
generation thereby
Accept comma addition
generation, thereby
putting the entire society in a perpetual state of discontent.
Violence
Use synonyms
whether presented in
a
Suggestion
an
awe inspiring heroic tale or in a soul crushing incident is still
violence
Use synonyms
, these nubile minds are to be educated on peaceful ways rather than being exposed to
such
Linking Words
content
Use synonyms
. A system of check and balance on our media industry is required immediately to curb the negative impact it has on the children and society as
whole
Suggestion
a whole
. If we continue as is the sociological and psychological issues among children will continue to grow.
Submitted by mic.jan.thomas on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • mimicking
  • aggressive
  • idolize
  • fear or anxiety
  • social interactions
  • mental health
  • proactive
  • supervision
  • content
What to do next:
Look at other essays: