Some people think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is often thought that the most effective method of motivating and encouraging employees to work harder is by remunerating them on performance. I disagree. Those who believe that workers would work better if paid
on
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for
performance output have a good reason to believe so. They feel that a hard working staff if well compensated, would
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harness his skill which will
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add to the bottom line of the
company
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example, in
sales
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, a marketer that makes most sales, which results
to
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in
more profit for the organization tend to receive more commission. Another reason could
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be that a well-motivated employee is likely to be loyal to the establishment where he works because
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where his needs are met. To illustrate, in Nigeria, a gateman who is being paid handsomely by his boss tend to go the extra miles in ensuring the safety of
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the provider
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, I believe that the best way to inspire staff is to discover their hidden talents and train them towards being the best that they can be. Sometime people do not know their worth until it is being discovered by a
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coach, which
in
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case should be either the human resources department or their employers acting as coach.
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, the likes of
Erst
painter (born in Germany, resident of France and the United States) who was a cofounder of dadaism; developed the technique of collage (1891-1976)
Ernst
& Young Firm, usually engage young graduates and train them to the peak of their abilities, little wonder experts have rated the audit firm as the
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with the most innovative
staff
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
stuff
; in fact they have received several awards globally as the
Company
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with the ‘most inspired’ employees. Another benefit of empowering them through skill acquisition is that they would become an ambassador of the parent
company
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when they start their own business, not as competitors but projectors of the image of the
company
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, which means the
company
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will never go into extinction having reproduced its kind. In conclusion, my view is that discovering and sharpening talents in workers
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appear
more motivating, that way they have not only been given
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fish, but
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been taught to catch fish which is for a life time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrinsic preference
  • liberating
  • physical activity
  • chronic diseases
  • natural light
  • job satisfaction
  • environmental connection
  • monotonous
  • dynamic
  • stimulating
  • fulfilling career
  • creativity
  • inspire
  • office politics
  • corporate structures
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