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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways.

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The recent proliferation in
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 dangers and, accidents
has led
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have led
 to a scourge. While some people are opined that the decline in speed limits on cars can lead to
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 others think there are
more good
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better
 ways to inculcate
safety
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 on roads. In my opinion, I believe that the best
way
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 is to apply laws and different disciplinary measures on vehicle owners. On the one hand, some people have suggested putting a limit on the speed of vehicles as the appropriate
way
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 to reduce
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 dangers. The reason is that most
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 accident occurs due to over speed of drivers beyond the level they can control and
thus
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 leading to
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 accidents.
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, even after the awareness created that over speeding kills, most
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 accidents recorded all over the world are due to the same problem of speed of drivers as most people are impatient in nature.
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,
making
engage in
doing
 the speed limit on vehicles necessary.
On the other hand
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, others consider other measures more effective
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 as implementing laws on driving and applying ways to discipline drivers that default and I agree. There are ways to implement
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safety which
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safety, which
 should involve
jail term
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a jail term
 for drivers who drink while driving. To illustrate, France has implemented the use of
points thereby
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points, thereby
 failure in any driving law causes one to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 some points and get suspended from driving for a while when all the points are lost.
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, laws as
this
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 are considered a better
way
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 to
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 on roads. In view of the issue discussed above, while people may vary in their opinion. I consider other
ways
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ways, such
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 as suspension, jail term and, lose
of
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on
 points as the most effective
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 to
safety
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 on roads.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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