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Many businesses in the world today are run by family members. Do the advantages of family-run businesses outweigh the disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experiences or knowledge

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Now a day most of the businessmen all over the world continue their
business
 with their family members. They
also
 think that it is the identity of their family. But I have a different opinion on
this
 topic. Every person has their own talent and own ideas to do in their life. Even though they have different ideas to do in their life, they are not allowed to shine in their wished career path. Due to their emotional sentiments, those people are dropping their wishes and goal and take over the
business
. Even they don'
t
 have much skill in that
business
, they make them take over their
business
. They think that their
business
 should be filled with their family members only. They are forcing their family members to involve in the
business
. Since many capitalists have their own family members in their
business
, The skilled people from other families are not allowed to participate in their
business
. Due to
this
 kind of businessman, Their dreams are vanishing. Even their family members are not skilled in that work, They won'
t
 allow other people to work on it.
This
 may lead their
business
 to loss. But they won'
t
 care about
such
 stuff. They always want their
business
 to be run by one of our family members. Because of
this
, Sometime there won'
t
 be the right person in the right position. To conclude
this
, The Right talent to be in the right place. Every person has their own talent. We should force our family members to stick with our own family
business
. We should let them shine in their own fields.
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