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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara or the antartic. Discuss advantage and disadvantage for tourist who visit these places.

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Tourism literally translates to travelling for one’s pleasure. In the
last
 decade, tourism has
upscaled
Suggestion
upscale
 drastically and tourists are nowadays keen on exploring terrains that are more challenging. I will now weigh the pros and cons for tourists visiting challenging destinations.
Firstly
, tourism has increased considerably and tourists visit a large number of places. There is an increasing trend to visit places with tough conditions as the adventurous lot of people receive a certain adrenaline rush with the risks involved. The thrill involved with the travel is
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 an important aspect.
For instance
, the interview of a Mt Everest climber states that “the thrill is what keeps her alive”. These trips often reckon a sense of self confidence, independence and risk management in individuals and help them possess skills that they would want to develop.
Such
 harsh weather
also instill
Suggestion
also instills
 a sense of value of the amenities we generally take for granted
such
 as water, temperature etc. The disadvantages that I perceive would include, a lack of food or medical supplies in the deserted regions.
Furthermore
, there is an increased risk of life if individuals are not ready or trained in the harsh conditions. There is
also
 a common problem of losing tourist and the government having to
then
 send rescue teams which causes a menace to the society economically. There is
also
 an inevitable damage to nature and a disruption of the ecosystems due to human interference and encroaching which causes destruction of mother nature and irreplaceable damage to the flora and fauna. To conclude, I would say travelling is an essential part of life and adventure is
necessary but
Accept comma addition
necessary, but
 before visiting difficult terrains one must be prepared and trained for the circumstances rather than causing harm to oneself and others.

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