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All cars that burns fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree ?

#cars #burns #fuel
Vehicular movement is an important part of human life as it is essential for the commuting of people and goods from one place to another. Some school thoughts had advocated for the replacement of fossil cars with electric ones, I totally support
this
 school of thought as it is needful towards the control of the environmental pollution as well as paramount to the reduction of the pressure placed on non-renewable fossil fuel.
Firstly
, fossil based vehicles are responsible for the upsurge in environmental pollution witness in the
last
 decade, the increase in human population had led to a proportionate increase in fossil based cars, which in turn led to the release of the harmful carbon mono oxide responsible for the depletion of the ozone layer,
hence
 the global warming and melting of the polar ice witnessed so far.
For instance
, the National Weather Center had reported that Fossil based vehicles are responsible for 76% of the total
emited
expel (gases or odors)
emitted
 Carbon mono oxide,
therefore
 replacing them with electric cars will have a positive effect on the environment.
Furthermore
, the fossil fuel used by these vehicles
are extracted
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is extracted
extracts
extract
 from the environment,
this
 had constantly subjected the soil to pressure causing distortion in the natural ecosystem and
also
 making the earth prone to several natural disasters.
For example
, the Natural
Disasters Agency
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Disasters, Agency
 (NDA) in their 2019 bulletin expressly stated that reduction of fossil mining by 10% will result
to
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in
 a 70% decrease in natural disasters,
this
 clearly highlighted the danger of fossil mining,
hence
 the need to replace them with electric cars. Conclusively, fossil cars had been of immerse usage to human, its replacement will help in achieving the Sustaining Development Goals on the environment and
also
 reduce natural disasters to a reasonable extent.

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