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Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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It is quite common these days in many countries for young people taking a break after finishing their high school and starting own work careers.
This
 essay will discuss whether young people need to study directly or should they get short years from a tertiary education. For those who choose to go a college or
university
, there are some advantages and disadvantages. One of the big advantage is you are still in the habit of studying. By going to college or
university
 directly you would not lose your learning skill and easily adapt the academic environment.
On the other hand
, you may not exactly know and determine what would be your future goal and profession or you may be more interested in freedom and parties than in your courses. At
this
 age, it is often difficult for students to take that kind of serious responsibilities. There are
also
 advantages and disadvantages working immediately after finishing the school. As soon as you start working, you will be provided with some benefits and salaries.
However
, there are certain dangers in taking off time at that important age. Young adults may end up with their education and never coming back to
university
. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job or to do something completely different
from
Suggestion
from a university course
university
 course. In conclusion, deciding whether
go
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to go
 straight into
university
 or
collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
 or taking
gap year
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a gap year
 to apply a work is something that faces every high school
students
Suggestion
student
. After thinking about
advantage
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the advantage
 and disadvantage of both options, the final decision should be based on what is best for you.
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