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Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual persons for address. ln other words, we have reached a stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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For a long time, our surroundings and environment
are going
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is going
 through a rough phase, and there are different problems
to
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with
this
 which are considered to be beyond the scope of people or our country. Many contemplate that
this
 deteriorating effect can be managed only at an international
level
 while others think that it is not as big as it is discussed and they believe that the country and individuals can control and bring
this
 to a safe state. Let`s discuss both viewpoints before concluding. The ecosystem is facing a lot of problems, and these are majorly caused due to the lack of awareness in
public
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the public
. Many of us are polluting and destroying the environment for a comfortable lifestyle, with the usage of automobiles and the extreme consumption of fossil fuels. These are man-made problems and are to be dealt with by individuals responsibly.
However
, there are other problems like lack of water and mineral resources which are in the scope of the country.
On the other hand
, issues like global warming
are
introduces an alternative
or
 something that needs attention at the global
level
.
Although
 welfare organizations are running campaigns to promote awareness extensively, there seems to be a gap due to the negligence in the public and society.
This
 is the major problem and it has to be fixed at an individual
level
 and it is not a concern that needs to be addressed internationally. In my opinion, all the major problems are a result of misuse and a blind eye towards the environment and
this
 has to be managed by people or nations. There are very limited issues that need attention
globally but
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globally, but
 everything needs correction and fix at an individual
level
. I disagree that the only way to protect our ecosystem is at an international
level
 as it is something that needs to be dealt with at an individual
level
.

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