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Working from home,eome think it is beneficial while some people say it may dustract the family routine.Do you agree or disagree.

#home #eome #people #dustract
The bar charts highlight the percentage of marriages and
divorce
 rate from 1881 to 1994, over a 13 year period of time in eight different nations. Overall, what stands out is that even though the proportion of marriages were decreased th
roght t
he period in all countries, except Denmark,
divorce
 rate witnessed a growth during
this
 time.
However
, the USA and Denermark had an opposite trend. Focusing on the marriages, the highest number can be seen in the USA in 1981, at approximately 11%, other nations ’ figure was around 6%. In 1994, the proportion dropped for all co
ntires a
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
counties
counters
bout 1% than the original date. Denmark, the only country had the reverse trend, which improved almost 2%. Percentage of divorces,
on the other hand
, Italy had the lowest percentage of
divorce
 in the group followed by Ja
ppan a
a constitutional monarchy occupying the Japanese Archipelago; a world leader in electronics and automobile manufacture and ship building
Japan
nd France. The USA’s
divorce
 rate almost proportional to its wedding as well. Despite
this
, both America and Denmark experienced a reduction in the percentage of divorces. Interestingly, Germany’s figure remained the same for the both years, at 2%.
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